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22 December 2012

Writing: Avoid Writing about Things that Are Already Obvious


Examples:
The underlined words in the sentences below are unnecessary. The meaning of each of the underlined phrase is already implied in the sentence.
 
  • I bought a bag from the store.
  • I took a shower in the bathroom.
  • I cooked the food with fire.
  • I drove the car on the street.
  • I listen with my ears.
  • Water, which is wet, is very useful to people.
  • People should wear jackets in winter because it is cold in winter.

You should write about new information
Examples: 
  • I bought a bag from a man who sells items from the back of his car.
  • I took a shower outside.
  • I cooked the food by burning old newspaper.
  • I drove the car inside the mall. Really.
  • I listen with my noseWhat?!
  • The water that we bought from Rob’s store tastes like lime juice.
  • People should bring water proof jackets even in summer because there is always a chance of rain.

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